A much better letter.

I do not know what happened to the conclusion though.

Try to take a break and reread your words carefully, as I found a few simple grammatical errors.

The use of quotes is admirable, I think. Whether it gets you the job or not, I think it is a good reflection of the uniqueness of you.

At the end of the day, the most important thing is to be yourself. If you can do that clearly and wholly, you give yourself a chance to be evaluated under the right conditions.

-- Unknown